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General Category => Entertainment => Music => Topic started by: steve folkster on May 09, 2015, 02:40:43 PM

Title: Song Help
Post by: steve folkster on May 09, 2015, 02:40:43 PM
Wrote a pro-american song and wanted some feedback....thanks

link below!1!1!!!

in the song benny stands for america!


https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5EtYPrsm35g (https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5EtYPrsm35g)
Title: Re: Song Help
Post by: walkstall on May 09, 2015, 02:46:30 PM
Quote from: steve folkster on May 09, 2015, 02:40:43 PM
Wrote a pro-american song and wanted some feedback....thanks

link below!1!1!!!

in the song benny stands for america!


https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5EtYPrsm35g (https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5EtYPrsm35g)


Hmm...
Even with 8.000$ hearing aids I could only hear less the half of your words. 
Title: Re: Song Help
Post by: kit saginaw on May 10, 2015, 04:39:00 AM
Quote from: steve folkster on May 09, 2015, 02:40:43 PM
Wrote a pro-american song and wanted some feedback....thanks

You're not too far away from being polished and pertinent.  The tune is hook-worthy, but needs some dimensional breathing-space. 
Title: Re: Song Help
Post by: steve folkster on May 10, 2015, 08:51:09 AM
Can you elaborate?

Should I create a sequence in between verses?


Benny in the song is a welfare reciever asking god to loan him money.  God said such a mentality is for the devil.

Thats the core of the song.
Title: Re: Song Help
Post by: kit saginaw on May 12, 2015, 05:34:18 AM
Just that you needed to mike your guitar separately, then blend both recordings on a third unit.