Filter Words and Phrases to Avoid in Writing Fiction

Started by Solar, April 17, 2021, 08:07:09 PM

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Solar

This is a great read for writers, or even forum posters hoping to make an impact with their articles.

Bertie's experience is relayed secondhand. When word economy is critical, this approach works. However, wouldn't you rather become so involved that you almost feel it yourself?

Bertie felt the warm sand between her toes as she walked.

With a few tweaks, we can strengthen the sentence.

The sand trickled between Bertie's toes, radiating warmth with every step she took.

Pretty long read, but damned if she isn't spot on! :biggrin:

https://annerallen.com/2017/06/filter-words-and-phrases-to-avoid-in-writing/

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